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DIVING DEEPER: A Writing Workshop

Do you feel compelled to write,  but something is stopping you from getting on with it?

Do you feel you have a story to tell, or simply something 'to say' but don't know how to start, or how to continue?

Are you looking for a deeper connection to your self, or a sense of fulfilment?

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  Sandra : Inspirational Ambassador

Anonymous Assignment - speaking out 2

Sandra said Jun 29, 1:03 AM:
 

I sleep on the hard carpeted floor thinking how I got here…

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This post is anonymously posted in response to this assignment. For more details on how this works, also see this anonymous topic assignment.

COMMENTING:
with this assignment  (as with all work posted on Diving Deeper ) it is important that all comments be about the piece, - the writing - how it affects you, what it is about the writing that works for you etc; not to whoever you think or imagine is the 'author' of the piece.

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I sleep on the hard carpeted floor thinking how I got here. I know what fear is when I see him around the house; I know he causes a lot of chaos. I know he loves it, the glint in his eyes, the sense of propriety and power radiating around the house. My heart lunges in my chest when he is near: close. That is why I’m here. The arguments, the shouting, the words said. I meant everything. I meant every ounce of hatred built up in me. I was born to haunt you, to kill you, to go in life searching for you blood. That’s what you’ve made me father, a blood thirsty creature: one of the vampires, one of the criminals, one of the humans. Humanity is a laugh. The creator of Dracula knew it, and so do I, I want your blood.

I want to rip your heart open, feast on the blood and laugh at you on the floor. I want to look at the fear in your eyes as you go down: as you die. When I laugh at you, I want it to be the last thing you hear. I want it to haunt you for eternity. I want, I want, I want…
  quietlaughter : .

Re: Anonymous Assignment - speaking out 2

quietlaughter said Jun 30, 5:59 AM:
 

Ok, more please. I want to know more about what is going on for this ‘I’ character, why the hatred, why the anger, why the powerful emotions…. This piece made me shiver – there is a rawness there that I can feel under my skin. I liked the force behind the voice of the ‘I’ character… speaking out, fighting back against what? Something terrible it feels.

The length of the piece is like a punch to the gut.

Good dive…
  "Mudge" : Curmudgeon in Chief

Re: Anonymous Assignment - speaking out 2

"Mudge" said Jul 6, 11:13 AM:
 

Good contrast between “powerfull” and “powerless”.  How powerless has become powerfull.  Once is not enough.