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Ok, my first entry here and I am asking you guys who are verry verry talented wordsmiths, to let me know if this resonates wth anyone else?  The whole point  of my poetry is helping people to bridge the gap between waking up and finding the truth and since i have no other current audiences to let me know if my poetry makes sense, I would appreciate your comments. Thanks.


                                                                     wake up Neo…..

 

My cursor is blinking,

and I've been searching all night,

looking for Morpheus,

or a ray of light;

through internet chat rooms,

boards, and blogs…

I am tired and hungry

and my head throbs.

I know things aren't right

and I know truth is “out there”

but the question remains

can I find it? Where?

How can I tell what is real,

what is true?

How can I trust

what I'm getting from you?

“Meet me tonight,”

I hear in the ethers.

My Intuition calling me

to the edge of all frontiers.

I might as well try it,

I can't find out alone.

The old ways aren't working,

and I answer the phone.

The answers start coming

and I can't take them all in

Like fractals they spin off

more questions again.

Though filled with danger

and agents and fear,

in glorious courage

my choice remains clear.

 I choose the red pill

of my own design.

I step onto the path

And watch for a sign

that this is the way,

the truth, and the light,

the end of all darkness,

and the true joy of life.

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Well written “story” of feelings and emotions we have all had. Wish I'd written this.  Carry on!
Sometimes, one just has to jump, and know that wings will spread and catch the wind….

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It is from the power that I, even I, have been sent
And unto those who think on me that I have come;
And I was found in those who seek me.
Look upon me, o you who think on me.
And you listeners listen to me!
You who wait for me, take me unto yourselves,
And do not chase me from before your eyes.
And do not make your sound hate me: nor your hearing.
Do not be unacquainted with me at any place: or even at any time.
Keep watch! Do not be unacquainted with me!

––––Thunder, Perfect Mind
from The Nag Hammadi Library (famous for the Gospel of Thomas)

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Makes perfect sense to me. I resonate with Neo, who courageously steps forward onto the path of the unknown. Following his inner guidance, “when the old ways aren’t working”, he begins walking in faith.

Thanks for taking me right to my favourite movie - ‘The Matrix’. I love Neo!

Thanks for sharing your first post with us!

Nicola

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My intuition guides me to a word image that I hope connects with archtypes in all of us. Writing poetry is rather new to me and I am  learning to trust this process. You guys are seeing my first baby-steps. “One” does not know if the intended communication is received until the “other” responds and lets them know and eedback like this creates more trust in myself.  Thank you all for taking the time to respond. 

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